Monday 29 June 2015

The door Jayden A Zackary T

I hadn't seen the door before; it wasn't there last night, but I must sleep because it's a school night.

dream
As the young chap was on his way to school, he was seeing strange things. When he was at school, the teacher turned into an alien and when he looked out the window his car was a ufo, and flew off with Miss Enderman. 
day
When he woke up, he was relived that it was not real life, because he loved school and never missed a day. As he walked into the door he waddled into Freddy's dimension, he shut the door behind him. Suddenly, the door smashed into a million peace's. "What would he do?" He walked into a pizzeria called "Freddy Fazz bears pizzeria" it was haunted.    

1 comment:

  1. This is an interesting start boys. I wonder what is going to happen next....

    I like your use of commas today too. Could your next paragraph include some adverbs e.g. cautiously, silently
    Miss Gardiner

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