Relaxing as usual, in the crystal clear ocean , with her adventures friends Dave and Daisy.Dripppy felt a sudden heat wave which came over her like a quilt covering you when you get into bed. Slowly, she began to drift up into a vastpuffy cloud-she was evaporating!
"Its happening again guys, get prepared!"
Cautiously, she squeezed through the tight spaces of the cloud, she began to wait for her friends.She saw them coming the fun had began!
"whohooo!" Drippy squealed
She then felt a sudden tickle up her spine like a spider crawling on your face when your asleep. She altered back into the water, to find she was becoming a droplet! Drippy was condensing.The cloud she was in grew bigger and blacker, until finally she fell slowly onto the hard concrete ground. she tried to pick her delicate self up. More droplets joined her including her friends(Daisy and Dave),they just had 1 more stage to go.
Drippy and her friends fell on to a mountain, she then realised that she was going on her OWN water slide. How cool is that? She then came back to her usual spot waiting with her bubbly friends."when will the next one come again drippy?" said Dave and daisy
"It will come soon, it will go on and on, it is a water cycle, I can not wait!" exclaimed Drippy.
The next few days came and that time had come it was cycle time!
by Brogan
I am really impressed with this piece of writing. In particular, I really like your similes, Brogan!
ReplyDeleteRemember to use subordinating conjunctions e.g. although, despite, if, because etc to begin some of your sentences